Hey, I’m working on a Sci Fi/Horror Script for a Movie. 1 Movie a self contained narrative with little intention for a sequel…Now please Scripts/Concepts need to evolve so please do not flame.Constructive Criticism for example (Alien was originally entitled StarBeast – a B Movie Idea Much)The trouble I am having is with either the setting be dystopian in nature or a rather more hopeful landscape? – It’s set in the future…On an EXTREME CLOSE UP of a star in the night sky. PAN OUT. The black sky is like an abyss with scorches of purple. Earth’s sky looks odd looking almost Alien. The scene is cold,vacuous and foreboding. Distant stars twinkle like diamonds in the sky. Lightning bolts scar the landscape. – We Retract SLOWLY and PAN DOWN from the ClOSE UP of the star. A storm is gaining momentum. The desert is in the clutches of the wind.
Our opening is dystopian..a ravaged landscape by an unknown force….We PAN across the fringes of the Desert. Large concrete buildings of harsh an
imposing shapes and sizes. Through shots that hold for a few beats on now inanimate objects such as cars we establish an eery uncomfortable setting. Suddenly a burnt out car explodes into a fireball. Red flashes can be seen as if the eyes of the Devil are staring at us…They die down in frequency. A shadow is cast across one of the structures. It would pass for human if not for unnaturally elongated arms/forelegs. Much like that of a Preying Mantis. It screeches. An unworldly sound. It acts like a Sonic BOOM….an almost immortal entity has arrived.

Next we arrive at a scene most reminiscent of a Nazi concentration camp. A futuristic holocaust facility. Women are used as meat. Raped, murder. Treat like Dogs. We establish our protagonist. Muscle toned wasted, body ravaged by bad nutrition, routine beatings.
Startling electric blue eyes, platinum blonde hair. Looks like he could crush a mans skull into dust. Rip the guards head from their rotten spines….The rest of the narrative is somewhat convoluted…I just need opinions on whether you feel the overall introduction at all could work for you? If not why and how could it?